Saturday, April 16, 2016

Weekend Writing Warriors - Silver Sky at Dawn. April 18, 2016

Thanks for stopping by today. Last week, we left off with little kindergarten aged Teddy Lee of Silver Sky at Dawn trying to make the sign for "I love you" to his mother, Lorena. His big sister, Leesa Shayne, is about to give herself a baby ulcer as she walks her baby brother across the street so they can board the school bus. Lorena is trying to stay focused on the morning routine, but having just found adulterous texts in her husband's phone, she can't really pull it together.

“Come on Teddalee!” Leesa’s eyes were wide with worry, as though she feared she couldn’t hold off the nonexistent traffic much longer. Her purple backpack sparkled in the bus’s headlights as she guided her six-year-old brother, whose mind was always about three clicks ahead of his body, around the front of the bus and up the steps.
Through the window, Leesa successfully molded Teddy’s fingers into the proper sign. He smashed it to the glass proudly.
I returned it as the bus’s doors squeaked shut. With a jerk, the giant vehicle roared to life and bounced down the street and out of sight.

With that, my babies were gone. Safe on the bus that would take them to school. Far away from the toxic environment of our happy home.

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10 comments:

  1. Ouch - that's a very powerful final line.

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  2. With the kids now safe at school, I wonder how she'll take care of the cheating husband? I don't think I'd want to be him right now. Nice snippet.

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  3. Holding it together for the children even as her world shatters.

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  4. Is she going to get mad? Or is she going to get even? Even when her world is falling in on her, a mother still has to take care of the children. Good snippet.

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  5. Now that the children are gone for a while, it sounds like it's time for a talk with the hubby.

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  6. She did a great job, keeping it together for the kids. But now...oh, that man better run! Great snippet!

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  7. Great description but ouch what a moment to lead up to. Thanks for sharing.

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  8. The irony of that last lines really grabbed my gut.

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  9. It sounds like a collision course to serious sadness. It felt very real. Good writing. :-)

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